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#1 Blake

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Posted 31 August 2012 - 11:34 AM

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Looking through all my old posts on a Naruto forum (when I was 11) I found something pure gold. A story (written by me) called "Kenson". Let me add that it is completely terrible.

I was in chat when I found it again, so I posted it. As you can guess, supreme hilarity ensues. In fact, it was so funny, I decided to make a thread about it. (As you can see.)

I will post the whole story (unfinished, but still 12 chapters) in this thread, word for word. (The original thread is here.)

Here it is:

Arcs:
1.Delivering the golden apples
2.The 5 golden mirrors
3.N/A
(All the arcs after 2 are N/A)

Chapter 1, Just The Beginning.

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Chapter 2, Sinun and Gragon.

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Chapter 3, Cannibals.

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Chapter 4, Gragons Ability's.

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Chapter 5, Moue and the Volcano.

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Chapter 6, Kaue.

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End Of Arc 1: Delivering The Golden Apples.

Beginning of arc 2: The 5 Golden Mirrors.


Chapter 7, Sabriate.

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Chapter 8, The Canyon of death.

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Chapter 9, Rock Avalanche.

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Chapter 10, The Second Mirror.

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Chapter 11, Gragon's Death?

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Chapter 12, Fire.

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Edited by Blake, 11 August 2013 - 02:15 PM.


#2 Zebra

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Posted 31 August 2012 - 11:51 AM

This... This is.... AMAZING! XD

"Looks like we have some cannibals on our hands" lol

Edited by Zebra, 31 August 2012 - 11:53 AM.


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Posted 31 August 2012 - 12:13 PM

WE NEED TO MAKE THIS INTO A ANIME!!!!!!!!

Favourite lines.

"He tossed me a bag. Even without opening it I could feel the power of these apples. I had to taste one. I reached in and the Man stopped me."

"Cause when Cannibals choke they explode and acid comes out of them! If any of the acid touches us were dead!"

They walked and saw the hole I fell in, well it wasent a hole. It was a Volcano.

We ran. Rocks falling everywhere. We all almost got hit by a big rock. A little rock hit my head. Another little rock hit Gragon's head and he fell down.

He fell into a trapdoor with spikes. Lots of spikes. I wasn't worried he is immortal.
"Don't worry" I said "He is immortal."
"He isn't if he gets stabbed in the heart!" Sinun said
I looked down to see Gragon stabbed right in the heart.

We stopped dead in out tracks when we saw this gooey snake like thing.
"Watch out" Sinun said "It spits out acid, acid that melts you"

Edited by stephen, 31 August 2012 - 12:13 PM.

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#4 Blake

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Posted 31 August 2012 - 12:27 PM

My favorite quotes:

Sinun charged in, one of the Cannibals swung their arm at her. But somehow she dodged it, and the Cannibal's hand hit the ground. All I knew is that she has had years of training. But what about me? I didn't have any training. Meanwhile the Cannibal's arm was still on the ground, it seemed like it was stuck. Sinun ran up the Cannibal's arm, and went on the Cannibal's shoulders. Like a piggy back ride. Then she started stabing the Cannibal with her knife.

"A little help here?" She yelled

"Gragon, you stay here now OK" I said trying not to be mean

"OK Sure." Gragon said

I ran over to Sinun, I tryed to stab the Cannibal with my sword but before I could the Cannibal jumped. He was trying to get Sinun off. She fell off. I ran to her but before I could get there the Cannibal grabbed Sinun, he put Sinun over his mouth and was about to drop her into his mouth. But I did something really stupid. I threw my sword at the Cannibal's eye but it must of been my aim cause it went right into the Cannibal's mouth. That must of been a good thing cause the Cannibal choked and droped Sinun she quickly got up and she said,

"Get out of here C'mon!"

"Why??"

"Cause when Cannibals choke they explode and acid comes out of them! If any of the acid touches us were dead!"


My heart beated so fast, and then the Cannibal exploded. We were far away enough. Acid flew everywere, even on the other Cannibals. The other Cannibals melted, it was the most terrifying thing I have ever seen. Buildings were melting and even people.


They walked and saw the hole I fell in, well it wasent a hole. It was a Volcano.

"Oh my god!!" Sinun and Gragon said at the same time.

"Ahhhhhhh!!" I screamed,

I saw the lava at the bottom I knew I was going to die.


was falling into the lava. I thought I was going to die. Luckily I landed on a rock, that was sinking by the second. I jumped on the next one till I got on a big one that would take a while to sink. Gragon got a rope out of his backpack, well not a rope. He was looking for a rope then fell off the edge of the volcano. He fell into the lava then I remembered he is Immortal. he came out his clothes burnt but weren't on fire anymore. He yelled,


He took out a sword and swung at me, I hit his sword with my sword. He must of been trained good. I swung at him and he hit mine with his. Kaue jumped on the stage, and climbed up on top of the stage's lights, a big one. He made it fall, it was right on top of me. I ran to dodge it. I dodged it. Sinun and Gragon untied Moue and they went in a corner. I went on stage, and Kaue jumped down right in front of me.


Sabriate shot a arrow at the snakes eye. She hit it like it was a bulls eye. The snake fell to the ground. Lifeless.


Sabriate shot some arrows at its eye. Now that made it irritated. It hit us back. Well only Sinun and Sabriate. I ran behind him. I did something that was more funny than good. I stabbed my sword into his butt. That must of did it cause it started picking up rocks and throwing them at everyone. Even the other cyclops. I almost got hit by one, then he picked up a rock so big he just dropped it on himself.


We started running. But then a big rock stopped us from going. Rocks were falling from everywhere.


I hit the rock as hard as I could, and there was a crack in it. I hit it about 4 more times, the crack got bigger. Sabriate shot a arrow at the rock, that did it. The rock split in half.



I jumped out of the car. It didn't hurt as much as I thought it would. Then Sabriate, Sinun and Gragon came flying out of the car. The car crashed and exploded.


And that is just a couple.

Edited by Blake, 31 August 2012 - 12:32 PM.


#5 aaron

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Posted 31 August 2012 - 12:58 PM

Excellent, other than the grammar, but I understand since you were young.
Also, it sounds like you were influenced by the Percy Jackson series.

Edited by Sir Aaron, 31 August 2012 - 12:58 PM.

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#6 Blake

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Posted 31 August 2012 - 01:01 PM

Also, it sounds like you were influenced by the Percy Jackson series.


Yup. LOL

That and Naruto.

Edited by Blake, 31 August 2012 - 01:02 PM.


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Posted 31 August 2012 - 01:04 PM

Yup. LOL

That and Naruto.

Hurry up and post the rest plz.

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#8 Blake

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Posted 31 August 2012 - 01:21 PM

Hurry up and post the rest plz.


That is it!

I might make 1 more chapter where the all the characters die in overly violent ways, should be entertaining. :D

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Posted 31 August 2012 - 01:28 PM

That is it!

I might make 1 more chapter where the all the characters die in overly violent ways, should be entertaining. :D

I was hopping, it would be finished, make them die at the very end of the mirror quest though?

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Posted 31 August 2012 - 03:23 PM

Like I said, a dramatic reading needs to be made...

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Posted 31 August 2012 - 03:35 PM

i never found a good place to say it so i will say it now, i like ur profile picture :D
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#12 WisdomPowerCourage

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Posted 31 August 2012 - 04:05 PM

I read chapters 1-9 and I thought it couldn't get any worse, then I read chapters 10-12.

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Posted 31 August 2012 - 06:12 PM

These characters could freaking kill their whole family and feel nothing about it.

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Posted 04 September 2012 - 03:46 AM

whoa this is crazy!cannibals n murder.I think I need a nap lol. Great job though.
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#15 Blake

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Posted 10 August 2013 - 07:51 PM

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Posted 10 August 2013 - 07:53 PM

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Posted 11 August 2013 - 04:59 PM

Still a better love story than Twilight, but can it face Legend ob Meg?



#18 Blake

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Posted 11 August 2013 - 05:32 PM

Still a better love story than Twilight, but can it face Legend ob Meg?

 

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Posted 22 October 2013 - 02:55 PM

Oh my god, I can't believe I just found this now.






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